That was a well done poem, man.
this time I'm wading through it
no matter how shitty it turns out to be
I just got up and started speaking
I won't lay down so easily
because now I know people who see me
and they prop me back up when I take a hit
so on days like today when it all hurts so bad
I can say fuck you to all this sick shit.
These two stanzas take me out of the poem a little bit. The rest of the poem is more subtle which works very well for me. Those two stanzas, where they're direct and moreso to the point, it's contrasts to the rest of the poem and it affected the flow for me a little bit.
All in all this was a good piece of work man, I can't wait to read some more of what you wrote.